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Once Ler Story


   Shelby's P.O.V

I ran through the town, completely lost now, but I didn't care as long as I was far away from him. So many people...not sure where I was going I kept walking, looking for a way out. 

   Suddenly, I hear music. Music? Aroubd here? I blink and look around and see a man in a gray fedora, white shirt with a gray vest over it and striped pants, lightly strumming a guitar, sitting down, back against the wall. As i got closer i could vlwaely see tomato guts staining his shirt on his chest. I could see more tomato on his face and in his hair and more all around him on the ground.
    
   He looked sad. On the right side of him was a pink..sweater..? I wasn't sure what it was. Moving towards him I called,"Hey! Are you okay?"He looked over as I stopped in front of him."Uh..."He blinked."Yeah..I'm fine.."He scrambled to his feet and I can now see how tall he is. I'm atleast a foot and a half shorter than him.  As i take a step back, I suddenly feel uncomfertable. I've always been short but for some reason this stranger seemed to make me feel different...

  Once Ler's P.O.V

"Are you okay?"She asked.  
   This girl in front of me, had short brown hair, with..blue? Extensions? Bold. Her eyes were a dull green with clear black circles out lining them. She wore a black t-shirt and jeans and sneakers, which I found strange,considering most people here looked like they walked out of a fashion magazine. Not that she wasn't pretty...

  "Yeah.."I nodded. Why did she care....? Most people never even looked at me, except to glare..and throw tomatos...

   She smiled a little."Good...what...is that thing..?"She pointed to my pink  thneed on the ground. "That,"I picked it up holding it extravagantly."Is the amazing thneed!" I offer a dazzling smile. "A..thneed? What's it do..?"She looked extremley confused. "Anything! It could be a hat!"I take off my fedora and place it on her head and put it on like a hat."An umbrella!"I mold it into an umbrella."Anything."My thneed returns to normal.
 
   She laughs. My face falls. So much for someone different. "How much?"She smiles. "Er.."My mouth falls open."$3.75.."I gawk, astounded, as she pulls out a five dollar bill."Keep the change."I hand her the thneed and take the five and set it into my pocket."I'm keeping the fedora though!"She runs off and I stand for a moment."H-hey! Wait! My hat!"I run after her and she starts running towards the truffula tree valley. Well, I was heading that way anyways..I jump onto my wagon."Giddy up Melvin!"I yell and he breaks into a gallop towards trufilla tree valley.

   "Hey!"I cried, as we caught up to her. She was actually pretty fast..."Going my way?"She smiled and jumped onto the wagon and landed clumsily next to me. "Hiya."She grinned. I see my thneed tied around her waist."Can I have my hat back?"I snatch it from the top of her head before she can reply. She chuckled."Sure~" She nodded. I smiled. 

Shelby's P.O.V

 "Ya know..your still covered in tomato juice."I smirk. "Yes..I'm aware."He looked at himself."It was much worse yesterday.."He shrugged. "Its happened before?"My eyes widened."And you went back?" "Of course! I have to sell my thneeds."He smiled softly, and I could see some kind of sadness in his eyes.  I'm not quite sure I understand what's so important about his thneeds...they must mean a whole awfully lot if he's that determined to sell them. I'm glad I bought one."Well...maybe I should be going.."I stand up and then I look down at him. 

   "Are you sure?"He asked."I owe you.." "For what?" "For being the very first person to buy a thneed."He looked down, kind of embaressed."Ah yes~ and how did you want to repay me?"I smirked and sat back down."Well..want to come to my house? For some..tea? Or something?"He smiled. "Hm..okay."I returned the smile."What's your name boy?"I asked."I am the Once Ler."He did the best bow he could do sitting down."I'm Shelby."I smile again."Enchanted."He grinned back to me, and I felt..something in my stomach. Like a tickle. Like a million butterfly's were beating their wings inside of me. Swallowing, I changed the subject quickly. 


  "By the way...Once Ler..do you knit these..?"I asked."Yes."He replied then blushed a little as I smirked. "Oh come on. There's nothing un-manly about knitting! Nothing at all..."We look at each other and both burst into laughter as we ride deeper into the forest, the trufilla trees over head, and towards the Once Ler's house. 
Okai....I made one..as requested by :iconTreesap26plz: Ive recently become obssessed with the Once ler..anyways, I didn't spend that much time on it...so it couldve been a lot better. ^^" Tell you what. If you think I should countinue it..I'll actually put some effort into it. Deals? Let me know below~~~~~
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:iconnickieru:
nickieru Featured By Owner Sep 30, 2012
i'd run off with his hat too! though, i wouldn't jump on the wagon for a couple blocks!
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isonmad Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student Photographer
coun-tin-ue!!coun-tin-ue!!!
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:iconsuperfangirl28:
superfangirl28 Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012
xDD I probably will soon..
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:iconisonmad:
isonmad Featured By Owner Apr 12, 2012  Student Photographer
aaahhhhhhhhhhhhh yeay!!
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flymyway Featured By Owner Mar 17, 2012  Student Writer
The beginning almost started like mimint's did but other than that I liked it.
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:iconsuperfangirl28:
superfangirl28 Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012
Oh..well, thanks. :3
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:iconflymyway:
flymyway Featured By Owner Mar 18, 2012  Student Writer
U welcome
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katemickey Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
Lovely story (:
There's spelling mistakes, and you should really start a new paragraph whenever a new dialog sentence starts. That makes the writing look longer, and it also makes it easier to read (:
But- I love what you've got so far (: You've written Once-ler very well (:
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:iconsuperfangirl28:
superfangirl28 Featured By Owner Mar 15, 2012
Thanks a lot for the advice :) I'll defiantly try to do that. Thanks so so much! Glad you like it!
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ViolaDork998 Featured By Owner Mar 12, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
That was cute, you should continue.
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